For week 4 we have looked at a video and we picked a character to be, I picked the root take a look at the video.Somalia. know take a look at my creation.
It has been about two days in this rusty old boat, I am Ethan and I am a robot, the crew on this boat takes me and my robot friends everywhere. We are their guardians. We save them, that makes us heroes. I heard yelling there was fighting in the boat we got unleashed, we haven't seen the view in ages. It was like a fairy tale. The boat was bigger than we last saw it.
Enough of the view! We have a job to do. We foot tripped them and cornered them, once we got all of the roaming around done we took care of the pirate captain. He looked outside to see that his men have been held as prisoners. They left after that and let's hope they learnt their lesson. We let free all of the crew, they thanked us. Once again we went back where we belong in the crates.
Hi Mikayla WOW!! I really like your writing, keep up the effort and I hope you can post more of your writing on your blog . Next time can you do some more paragraphs. This is the best Mikayla Keep it up.
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ReplyDeleteI like your blog post and your writing because how detailed it is, I also like how you have described the boat and everything else. I think you could do more writing, like Ms. Millard told me, when my writing was short she told me I could do more. I think you should take my advice because I know you could do more writing and describing.
Hi Zayd, thank you for the comment, I would write more If I had more ideas to write but I will try next time. maybe we could have a competition who can write the most?
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DeleteSure, that sounds fun, I can give you more ideas for writing if you want. Thank you for your reply.
DeleteThat sounds good, who is going to win? In the red corner we have Mikayla and in the Blue corner we have Zayd. Who will win, lets wait until next week.
DeleteI think I'd rather the pink corner, but ok.
DeleteWow, but you can never go wrong with pink, I am going to win! tough luck trying to beat me.
DeleteNope, all I need is bad luck to win. Because you never know when karma can strike.
DeleteOk, it on, be aware I have a secret weapon.
DeleteWhat secret weapon? All my secret weapon is, is my creative mind!
DeleteWell I have a few tips, why will I tell you.
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DeleteI have a few tips. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UDVSw54VU1A
DeleteThat is copy write, thanks for telling me your tip, prepare to die.
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DeleteYou want to die? OK.
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DeleteNo, I am happy that I actually am a boy because I don't have to deal with beaing a girl.
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DeleteWell girls, are not gross like boys and they are pilot. girls run this world.
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DeleteGreat story Mikayla I really enjoyed it But you need to work on some more punctuation. In your introduction to your post you forgot the b in Robot so instead is said root. Keep your amazing writing up.
ReplyDeleteHi Mikayla, I really like how you described your story. Next time you might need to add some more paragraghs into your writing because I don't think that 2 paragraghs are enough but it is so far so good.
ReplyDeleteHi Mikayla I like how you used capital letters and full stops. Your work is perfect. Next time can you do some more paragraphs because I want to read more of your story.
ReplyDeleteHi Mikayla,I really like your conversation with Zayd because it tured into a story of how you where fighting as red and blue prison
ReplyDeleteThanks Evelyn, me and Zayd were being silly.
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