The Present

W.A.L.T:  Write a narrative

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when….

• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.
• Seeks feedback and makes changes to texts to improve clarity and meaning.

In Ako Ngatahi we had to write a narrative about a video. It was about a boy opening a present that was a dog with three legs. Here is the video of the present. I hope you enjoy my story.

The Present

The Present

It was the weekend which means my mum would go on a shopping spree, she was wearing a white T-shirt and some jeans she looked very lovely. She went out when she was gone all I did was

play video games on my xbox 360 at home. Then my Mum came home she had a box I thought to myself “Could it be a xbox one for me?” She opened the blinds, it was so bright.

“Mum, shut the blinds it hurts my eyes and I am trying to play my game”.

Then the box moved and a puppy jumped out. It was cute, he was blonde. But there was one thing that let me down he only had three legs. He wanted to play with me but I rejected him. “I can’t believe mum brought me a puppy with one leg missing just because I have one leg missing too”. I went back to playing my Xbox.

Wait, look at him, he is so cute. No, remember he only has three legs. Wait, look at him being silly and being clumsy, he keeps falling over his three legs and we do have something in common we both have a leg missing

“I accept you because I am like you too we are going to be great friends” I said. I hope I will be a great owner and we can stay best friends forever,

so he grabbed a red ball and I got my crutches and we played outside. I said “I will call you Mischief, my twin”.

The End